A girl with anger issues, developed from an abusive father, and then kills her father after he killed her mother (apparently, though how she dies would have just caused a concussion.) To kill she becomes an animated character wielding a sword. Somehow the animated sword kills the person she is attacking (which from a creative standpoint is a pretty good idea) by causing interior damage. ***** stars for the drawings in the girl's sketchbook and wall.
***1/2 stars for the animation during the fights (some color and sturdier lines would inprove the animation to 5 stars)
** stars for the acting, the acting is very predictable and the way the scenes transition fail to bring the person the true emotion of the shot.
**** stars for the music very good choice of music, though it seems you took it from a soundtrack.
*1/2 stars for camera angles + usage +lighting. The camera angles very often draw your attention away from the main action and the lack in using a tripod or stabilizing device make it feel almost like watching a Bourne ____ fight scene (where you don’t actually see the fighting, just random camera angles of blurry walls) [again that is just a dramatization, for a home movie the camera motion is just slightly distracting] No lighting effects were added, if any they were not noticeable Over all, a sturdy 3.2 point score. Which for a home movie is very good. -comments- improve the acting deliverance and it will do extremely well.
Good Job, and keep up the good work.
Also, if you did an animated cartoon with the character and drawing style you had in the hardback I believe it would sell very well. Especially the animation style that you use. It’s just enough of the anime style to pull in the people that like anime cartoons, and just enough American style to bring in people that are fans of Marvell and other American cartoons.
Again, very well done, please peruse this further, with a little more antagonist and a deeper storyline a straight up 5 stars.
Again, please conceder making this into a 100% cartoon/anime with your animated character you developed; though you may want to tone down the adult themes a little if you make it into a cartoon. Just to make it for a bigger crowd.